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    Somewhere on a silent hill,
        where tree roots crinkle through stone
        and a lonely crow melts into bone,
    my left hand turns pink and blue
    holding onto a cigarette I named after you;

    and once before on this quiet hill,
        when it was just as cold
        and our bodies were just learning
            how to fold
    into the shape of something new,
    I never thought I would have to think of us
        in terms of two -

            but now this hill screams
            with a bitter wind
            that blows both hands
            into my empty pockets,
            and I realize that this cigarette
            will taste better
                as soon as it feels like home.
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=TristanCody Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
I enjoyed this very much. You had a rather intricate premise which you executed well and your word choice was rather spot on.

Excellent work,
Tristan Cody.
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=TristanCody Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
My pleasure!
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